Sunday, April 29, 2012

Blog #11


ROSE and PHIL enter the kitchen looking about for napkins to clean up PHIL's punch mishap. ROSE walks straight in without hesitation, while PHIL slinks in, looking embarrassed and worried.

 Phil
(looks embarrassed) So......where do you think the napkins are? (he has a worried afterthoughtDo you think there are spiders in here?????
Rose
(looking impatient) Well yes, I imagine there are. So who are you exactly?
Phil
(he looks worried) You...you don't recognize me? (he jumps) was that a spider?!
Rose
(very confused) all I know is that you are the clutz who spilled punch all over this horrid dress, I should bake you a cake! No, that wasn't a spider.......
Phil
(looking relieved) oh...okay. Well I'm Phil! Phil Charming....(he holds out his hand, and then looks worried as she still doesn't recognize him)The  one...erm, the one who...
Rose
(she looks stunned) Oh crap. YOU? I have to marry YOU? um, not that you aren't great or anything I just...uhhh (she thinks quickly and then runs to the corner pointing at something) SPIDER!
(Phil jumps a foot and scrambles to get a spoon. He bravely waves it around)
Phil
Don't worry! It is my duty and my honor...
Rose
( she walks from behind him and walks briskly, searching the cupboards) yes do shut up about that please we came to get napkins.
Phil
(he stutters)Quite, Quite right. yes. of course. well what's that in the corner? It looks like a pile of rags, that might do!(he warily approaches the pile of cloth)
Rose
Yes I suppose this will do...OW! Crapsicles!(she draws back the cloth, revealing a spinning wheel and pricks her finger)
(Phil hesitates, lookes confusedly at her, and slumps to the ground, and Rose stares, confused)
Rose
(standing over Phil who is clearly still breathing) Oh drat.

Thursday, April 26, 2012

blog #10 Dialogue moving forward

Rose
And then, WHAM! he was down! What happened?
Flora
(looking uncomfortable) well.......do you remember that charm bracelet that your other Aunts and I gave to you on your 2nd birthday......?
Rose
What this thing? (looking at the bracelet suspiciously)
Flora
Well yes! That's a charm reversal bracelet. So...
Rose
(looking incredulous) Since that curse was meant for me, it rebounded and hit Phil??
Flora
I'm afraid so dear.

Tuesday, April 24, 2012

blog # 9 Dialogue

Phil
(embarassed) So......where do you think the napkins are? (worried afterthoughtDo you think there are spiders in here?????
Rose
(impatient) Well yes, I imagine there are. So who are you exactly?
Phil
(worried) You...you don't recognize me? (jumps) was that a spider?!
Rose
(confused) all I know is that you are the clutz who spilled punch all over this horrid dress, I should bake you a cake! No, that wasn't a spider.......
Phil
(relieved) oh...okay. Well I'm Phil! Phil Charming....(he holds out his hand, and then looks worried as she still doesn't recognize him)The  one...erm, the one who...
Rose
Oh crap. YOU? I have to marry YOU? um, not that you aren't great or anything I just...uhhh (thinking quickly) SPIDER!
(Phil jumps a foot and scrambles to get a spoon. He bravely waves it around)
Phil
Don't worry! It is my duty and my honor...
Rose
yes do shut up about that please we came to get napkins.
Phil
(stuttering)Quite, Quite right. yes. of course. well what's that in the corner? It looks like a pile of rags, that might do!
Rose
Yes I suppose this will do...OW! Crapsicles!(she draws back the cloth, revealing a spinning wheel and pricking her finger)
(Phil hesitates, cookes confusedly at her, and slumps to the ground, and Rose stares, confused)
Rose
(standing over Phil who is clearly still breathing) Oh drat. 

Friday, April 20, 2012

Facts about Dialogue

1. The dialogue in a story should move the plot forward. Meaningless dialogue can slow the story down, or lose the reader. (witticisms always help as well, they are needed more with a short film)
2. Dialogue shows the relationship between charaters, and implies information about the speaker's past, present and future.
3. Good dialogue reflects the speaker's personality. For instance, if the speakaer is a generally hostile person, he would not be going around saying "I love you man".  If the charater has an accent, that is also an important part of the dialogue. Is the speaker a foreigner? a native?

Wednesday, April 18, 2012

Hollywood Formula

OPENING SCENE:
Rose is in  the final battle with Maleficent, the evil witch she has sworn to destroy to revenge her mother's death (she died when a pile of spinning wheels fell on her). During the confrontation, Malificent has made Rose feel sorry for her by expounding on how she was an outcast, Rose, a fellow outcast, knows how this feels, and experiences empathy. However, then she flashes back to the day Malificent curses her, and the Story begins. the point, is that Rose remembers all of the horrible things Malificent has done, and that, outcast or not, she must be made to pay.
INCITING INCIDENT:
There are actually two. The forst is the freak death of Rose's mother.  Since she was crushed to death beneath a pile of spinning wheels, her death is ultimately Malificent' fault because she cursed Rose in the first place. This fuels in Rose a sense of vengeance. This is why she wants to become queen. The second is the Accidental nap of Prince Phillip. his sleep may mean that Rose never becomes Queen, which will never allow her to track down Malificent. Therefore Rose sets out on a Quest to cure Phil, whatever the cost.
SUBPLOT: Malificent is a mean, bitter old witch. Why? What happened? Well Malificent once went to the same finishing school as Phil's mother and Rose's mother (that's why the two are betrothed. Their mothers are friends). Naturally while the two girls are quite popular, Malificent is not. Thus she becomes embittered against the ladies an their kin. Classic bullying and self esteem problems. unfortunately, Malifecent can use magic, thus all their problems have begun.

Tuesday, April 17, 2012

Script Outline

SET UP:  The scene will start out with a banner announcing the birth of a prince, the banner must state that is in the land of fey. (should this be animated or not? Hmm)  and then will cut to people coming down the road to a castle. The mob comes closer, trumpets can be heard and  the main focus of the screen is a little red headed girl (2 years old) being dragged along by her mother. “ Rose don’t be such an ungrateful child , I’m sure he will be just wonderful” (her mother speaking).
                As they enter the castle, a feast is being held and the baby is viewed  (prince Phillip). He is a scrawny baby, who looks perpetually confused. Not at all engaging.  The viewer eventually learns through various conversations around the room that Phil and Rose will one day be married. During the festivities the evil witch maleficent rudely interrupts and due to an unfortunate overreaction attempts to cast a spell on Phil because she wasn’t invited.  However she was never much of a sports player and so she misses and hits Rose, who is sitting under a table and refusing to come out. This spell states that on her 18th birthday she will prick her finger on a spinning wheel and die. Crap. So, Rose is banished to the woods for her own safety until after her 18th birthday. She is accompanied by her three aunts, magical but strange, who present her with a magical charm reversal bracelet. This deflects spells cast on her, and dilute the spell’s power. After she leaves the kingdom, during a campaign to round up all of the spinning wheels, Rose’s mother, the queen, is crushed when a pile of spinning wheels falls on top of her. How ironic. Naturally, when Rose is told this on her 14th birthday, this plants a desire in Rose to avenge her mother’s death. This means becoming queen, tracking down maleficent, and getting even.  Rose is never told of Phil though, her aunts don’t want to be the ones to break the news. She can be a snot. 
INCITING INCIDENT:  The Woodland ball is to be held in honor of Rose’s 18th birthday (rose has to learn manners, because she is  a mud throwing tree climbing mess), and so Rose and Phil meet each other there, neither one knows who the other is. Phil ( a gangly, awkward kid ) is quite taken with her and promptly spills punch all over himself.  During their perusal of the kitchen looking for napkins, They both find a spinning wheel, hidden in the back of the cupboard, that has escaped the purge of the castle.  As rose draws off the covering to use as a napkin (apparently there are no other napkins? What a poorly equipped castle) because there is a spider web and Phil wont approach it, she pricks her finger on the spinning wheel. Because she is dumb I guess. But the charm reversal bracelet reflects off of her and hits Phil, reducing him to a deep sleep. Rose then learns his identity and realizes she must  find a way to wake him, or risk not being an effective queen (you need a king….no women’s rights).
RISING ACTION:
  1. Phil gets cursed and falls into a deep sleep, Rose is determined to cure him, but she must figure out the counter-curse.
  2. She goes and finds Flora who tells her it’s a riddle, “ wet and slippery, soft and sticky, I cure your ailments”. Rose assumes that this is the typical princess story and kisses Phil. Nothing happens. Drat.
  3. She is walking through the woods pondering when maleficent swoops down and  lands in front of her. She and Rose exchange trash talk, epic battle.
  4. eventually rose, while dodging spells, gets her bracelet on the witch, and when she casts a spell, she dies.
  5. Rose falls from a tree (they have been fighting in the trees I guess) and lands in a mud pit. She realizes that mud is wet….and slippery……………..
CLIMAX: Is the confrontation with Maleficent. She expounds upon how she was never treated as an equal, always a freak, and Rose begins to feel sorry for her. She knows how that feels. As she moves closer to maleficent, the witch tries to grab her, revealing her treacherous nature. Rose then remembers  how this woman was responsible for the death of her mother, and might cost her  the crown she has striven for. She climbs a tree and leaps from tree to tree trying to avoid malifecent’s spells. When she remembers the charm bracelet she gets close to maleficent, and a killing curse rebounds off of her and kills the witch.
FALLING ACTION: Rose now realizes that the cure may be  mud. She races back to the castle, collects Phil, and dumps him in a mud pit by her house. Phil wakes up, and is very embarrassed to be seen a muddy mess.  Rose is unsure at first if it has all been worth it, but Phil  builds a forest in the castle, to show he has accepted her, and she starts to think maybe he isn’t so bad.
RESOLUTION:  These two hang out for a while, Rose teaches him about her woods, he teaches her about state. They make a great team, get married, and together they reinstate the spinning wheel to the kingdom, thus increasing the economic productivity of FEY and it’s residents never went hungry again. The end

Wednesday, April 4, 2012

#5: revised logline

After a curse dooms a young prince to indefinite sleep, an unsuitable mud throwing princess must find a way to save him, thwart the vengeful witch, and prove herself worthy of the throne.

Monday, April 2, 2012

#4 logline

After a curse dooms a young prince to indefinite sleep, an unsuitable mud throwing princess must find a way to save him, his throne, and get revenge for the mother who died before her time.